Смохну пыль с темы, вот эссей заделал (не знаю откуда задание, ориентируюсь на формат САЕ):
It is common knowledge that computer technologies have a significantly positive effect on our lives. In particular, they are advantageous to such aspects of everyday life as access to information and doing shopping and receiving services.
To begin with, computer technologies are instrumental in gaining access to information. Today, by means of an average computer, almost any information can be obtained at the push of a button. Not only does the speed of getting information has dramatically increased, but also a variety of available topics has expanded infinitely. For example, anyone, if necessary, within an hour can learn something new, make a decision, read reviews about any product and plan further actions.
Another important sphere of life that is being improved by computer technologies is online shopping for goods and services. It saves time. Similarly, it saves money, as there are services that compare the prices of products. Any person can have almost any product delivered within hours. Having said that, online shopping cannot totally replace other types of shopping, since some physical characteristics of some products, for example, furniture, cannot be assessed through the Internet.
Overall, I am convinced that doing online shopping by using computer technologies gives more advantages to everyday lives than access to information does. Unfortunately, today the Internet is inundated with superfluous information and advertising. It makes online surfing more time-consuming and less productive, as intrinsically valuable information belongs to those who have it and is rarely shared. By contrast, by means of online shopping, anyone can get exactly what they wanted.
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Конечно, вывод выглядит длинным, в осн параграфах нет ссылки на избыточность информации как в выводе, вероятно нужно её добавить, но личное мнение же в конце идёт. Зато посмотрел видео про
Topic Sentence для осн параграфов. Надеюсь, они удались.
Кроме обычного пожелания увидеть отзывы/ошибки, главный вопрос - что с этим всем делать? - я пытаюсь понять насколько я готов к этому CAE. (Сейчас пока сдачи не предвидется, я думаю ориентироваться на осень). Конечно, есть проблема времени, вот это заняло 1 час 40 минут, что совсем не хорошо, видимо пока надо заняться ускорением.